Ellen Wallace
Here are two sentences that would benefit from an extra word or two to avoid confusion. Writers often take these shortcuts to avoid being pedantic. Fair enough, but it’s better to be clear. See if you can work out the problem; I’ll post my edited versions tomorrow.
from CNN:
The suspect allegedly shot and killed a man who had just withdrawn 200,000 yuan ($31,700) from a bank in Nanjing’s Dongmen Street on January 6 and then fled the scene in a car, China’s state-run Xinhua news agency reported.
from the Atlantic:
The average first-time mother is as old as any country in the OECD (30), and the career costs of having a child are sky-high.
GenevaLunch, 10 January 2012.
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Tags: editing, examples, Grammar, missing words
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